Talk:Constitution of the Union of Everett

Some Critiques
Overall, this is basically the US Constitution modified. If the Union broke away from the US because it was "corrupt," it would be stupid if they used the same consitutution just modified. They would start over. Some redundant things: Overall, I would suggest reorginization. Right now, it's just plain messy and inconsistent. --Personak 21:17, February 26, 2011 (UTC)
 * The sections are too long. Each paragraph should be a section.
 * It says "be elected, as follows: The citizens of the Union shall vote once, each vote counted nationally as a whole and not by state. The highest votes in total shall result in the election of the new President of the Union of Everett." This is a legal document, and it should only state what is, not what isn't. "Be elected by citizens over the age of 18" is all that's needed.
 * The whole "removal of president from office" paragraph is redundant to the first paragraph of Section 1. It is already clear that the president has a life term, and is elected.
 * The Union of Everett page says there are nine judges. The constitution needs to say it too, or say that the number shall be established in some method or other.
 * What is this single mention of "inferior courts?" It needs to be explained what these are and how they are established.
 * The "no person held to service or labour in one state" refers to slavery. Does that still exist in Everett? If not, this paragraph is useless.
 * The "all debts contracted...before the adoption of this Constitution" paragraph is redundant, as the Union didn't exist before the Constitution, and consequently there wouldn't be any debts.
 * The amendments, including the Bill of Rights, should be in the original document. Women wouldn't even be able to vote upon the adaption of the Constitution.
 * It dosen't say anywhere how laws are made, or what the laws can be. Everything the government does needs to be enumerated, or the government can be given limitless power excluding the abridgment of rights.
 * Several things described about the Union of Everett government aren't in the Constitution - such as the party ban, the impeachment process, gubernatorial representation, and judicial review.